The sentence Tim reads appears above Pookie who is shown with shopping bags, and eating cole slaw and drinking fruit punch. TIM: Pookie loves not only to go shopping, but also cole slaw and drinking fruit punch. TIM: Now, this is where it starts to get tricky. In this case, active voice sounds better: "Tammy yelled at Tommy, but he ignored her." Sentences are clearer when all the verbs are in the same voice. "Yelled" and "was ignored" are highlighted because one is active voice and one is passive voice. TIM: "Yelled" is an active voice verb, while "was ignored" is in the passive voice. The sentence Tim reads appears above Tammy yelling at Tommy who has ear plugs in his ears. TIM: Tammy yelled at Tommy, but she was ignored by him. Either he never called or talked to other girls, or he never calls or talks to other girls. "Called" and "talks" are highlighted because they are in different tenses. Here, "call" is in the past tense, but "talk" is in the present tense. TIM: When you're using parallel structure to list verbs, like "call" and "talk," they all have to be in the same tense and form. The sentence Tim reads appears above Tommy holding Tammy's hand and talking to her. TIM: Tommy promised Tammy he never called or talks to other girls. The officers have the letter "G" on their shields. Just don't use it twice, or you'll be arrested by the grammar police.Īn image shows a girl being arrested by the grammar police. TIM: So use it three time, or use it once. The sentence is shown with Tim's changes and the word "his" highlighted. TIM: Or, you can use the word all three times you could say, "Benny cares a lot about his hair, his muscles, and his clothing." TIM: So you can change it to, "Benny loves to style his hair, do laundry, and work out at the gym." The articles and possessive pronouns Tim mentions are shown. TIM: The same thing goes for articles like "the" and "a," and possessive pronouns like "his," "her," and "their." TIM: If you use a word like "to" to introduce a series, you only have to use it once.Īn X appears over the second instance of "to" in the sentence. The sentence Tim reads appears above images that illustrate what Benny loves to do. TIM: Benny loves to style his hair, to do laundry, and work out at the gym. The sentence is shown with Tim's changes. TIM: Instead, it should be, "funny, exciting, and entertaining." "Funny," and "exciting" are highlighted and appear under adjective and "entertainment" is highlighted and appears under noun. So the sentence is grammatically incorrect. "Funny" and "exciting" are both adjectives, but "entertainment" is a noun. TIM: When you write in parallel structure, all the parts of speech in the list have to match. The sentence Tim reads appears above an image of Moby watching the TV show and laughing. TIM: Dancing is funny, exciting, and entertainment. I see how you've tried to use parallel structure in places, but you've sort of done it wrong. ![]() Tim's reworked sentence shows above Moby's original sentence. TIM: See how that sentence is tighter and clearer than your original? The reworked sentence appears with the parallel construction highlighted. TIM: Let's try rephrasing that in parallel structure: Empty Vee broke our hearts, ruined our summer, and angered its loyal viewers. I know its viewers are angry, and you have ruined the whole summer. TIM: Empty Vee broke our hearts when it canceled Dancing with America's Next Top Housewife. Let's take a look at the beginning of your letter. It's an example of a rhetorical device, a technique authors use to make their writing clearer, stronger, and more persuasive. Parallel structure is when you repeat a particular pattern of words within a single sentence. What can you tell me about it, and what is its purpose? From, Lolo (Houston). TIM: Dear Tim and Moby, my teacher is making me practice parallelism in writing. TIM: Which is pretty convenient, because we just got a letter on that very topic. TIM: This isn't bad, but it could benefit from the proper use of parallel structure.Ī new e-mail alert beeps on the computer. Moby takes the printout of the letter from the printer. ![]() Moby likes Tim's suggestion and types a letter. Maybe you could write a letter asking them to put the show back on the air. The show, which assembles the worst people from every other reality show, has become an embarrassment to the network, and to America in general. ![]() ![]() TIM: The Empty Vee Network has canceled "Dancing with America's Next Top Housewife," its most popular reality series. Moby points to the Reality World webpage. TIM: Whoa, what's wrong, buddy? I haven't seen you this upset since the end of Toy Story 3. Text reads: The Mysteries of Life with Tim and MobyĪ robot, Moby, reads something on his computer and cries.
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